Charlie II

Hey JayBlu, I'm not a huge fan of prologues, I must say, unless they're particularly unique or written in an original way. So you'll have to take that into account ...

Hey SB Crew buddy! :D I was originally going to guess that this was an entry for the Valentine's Day Contest, but then I realised that you were sort of ...

Hey loverr, I love the way you fit words together in sentences. You definitely have a talent for writing well -- at least in stringing sentences together -- but I ...

Hey niteowl! I really like this poem because you've got an idea and a direction and the words you use all build up to an end that is satisfying to ...

Hey Hannah, It's interesting that you chose the title of your poem from the stanza which held the least interest for me. The poem touches on a few ideas: how ...

Hey AriaAdams! If, like you say, English isn't your first language then congratulations on writing a very impressive piece! :D I don't think you need to be self-conscious of your ...

Hey kasimkaey, Very powerful / topical subject matter. I wondered how many pieces like this I'd find on YWS a few weeks ago, but it seems it's taken a little ...

Hey creativityrules, This is a lovely poem, and I really enjoyed reading it. I'm not sure that I really have much I can criticise but I'll try to give a ...

Hey WGirl, There's some serious potential here. You've got a good eye for humour / comedy and the concept is great. I like that it's festive (and very appropriate for ...

I see what the reviewer before me has said is quite accurate -- this reads a lot like poetry and that whole effect seems to be due to the occasional ...

Hey iEuphoria! (Nice avatar, by the way!) It's an interesting poem you've got here -- on the one hand you have some fantastic phrases and great ideas that I really ...

Hey thepurplelover, This is quite different to many works posted here on YWS, because it looks like a prologue to a novel but it reads like a movie trailer. Somehow ...

Hey Kerokaeru! It looks like you've written a festive piece as we're getting close to Christmas! I wonder if it was inspired by you (or someone you know) doing Secret ...

Hey confetti! This is a really nice piece. It's short and powerful, but I'm not entirely convinced that you've explored as far as you could with it. There's only one ...

Hey Loller65. I read one of your older pieces ("My Encounter With God") and was pleased to see how much you've improved since then. ;) You've got a good control ...